Have to leave a hard message, man. It's tough love, I'm stoked he's willing to make graphics for us, but he's gotta know what's up.
I don't even like the first one, tbh. The font is too Metal. Go for handwritten cursive, broadway sign lettering, and italicized, bold, sans-serif font with a slight shadow behind it. Those are the 3 things I would highly recommend starting with.
(P.S. Inside, I hope you didn't take offense by my rant, I just needed to get the message across strictly and quickly. Hope you can forgive me <3)