Yo guys gonna definitely hit up the hustlin track, been sick with bronchitis the last day or two so Im taking it easy on my voice. hopefully you guys don't think Im dodging lol
Yo guys gonna definitely hit up the hustlin track, been sick with bronchitis the last day or two so Im taking it easy on my voice. hopefully you guys don't think Im dodging lol
"1,2,3,4,5,6, Pick up sticks. Bitch."
Antwan no offence intended but is the hustlin' track for real? Or shits n giggles?
Ohmid just introduced this thread to me so have sat here for an hour pouring over them all,
I'm no biggie but I live for rap and hip hope and have been writing for more years than my simple ass can count.
My 2 cents, please don't take any personally, it is merely opinion:
Antwan, you're straight up bad bro. The lyrics are nonsensical, your flow changes on the same line, your voice doesn't fit, I'm sorry but just no.
ISomali, I think you take prize for most underrated, yeah the intro was a piss take ha ha but you've got fluidity, a good voice, smooth style, it worked man, genuinely looking forward to hearing more.
DonVigo, yes yes, lovely stuff, very positive, flowed well in most places, there's a couple bits where you rush through the end of a sentence, its sounds like you've out a word extra in on some lines? Maybe try to reword it with a word less? N lyrically it needs a little work, I'd like to hear a story, or continuality through your track, but again, is like to hear more of your stuff, good shit.
Saunders, your voice is awesome, it does look and sound a bit weird so I can see where the lipsync comment came from but I like what you do, again, just work on having something to say people will want to hear, or that will open their eyes to things from your point of view.
Thadeuce, watch your mouth about the English, why you always trying to stir trouble? Also you write like an angry 14 year old who just heard nwa for the first time.
Keep up the good work guys, superb idea Antwan.
Peace
I wish my voice wasn't so fucking stupid...I feel like I could spit some nice shit....
GT - The Fr0sted Man
Originally Posted by fallingskyline
My voice doesn't fit haha
What does that even mean?
I'm doing another one soon..
stuff like that makes me disable comments on youtube though
don't really care for opinions on something I use to express myself..
my voice is high..
damn fucking straight fucker
I'm excited unlike half of the "average" doped out "mellow" rappers
seriously? Not trying to start anything here but I think that's hilarious
half of these MCs today use shit to modify their voices
their shit aint on point either..
You wanna give me advice give me advice on what beats to use.
edit: not a personal attack either..
goes for anyone here..
beats appreciated..
not that I'm not open to other's opinions I just don't care for the negativity within it.
There is a positive advice type of feedback believe it or not.
Last edited by Antwan; 07-17-2011 at 11:29 PM.
If you're going with the Beets, I suggest "Killer Tofu."
My real advice to you, Antwan, is quit freestylin' and write some stuff down. Once you have it written, practice it until you've got a flow going. Once you have the flow, record it, and be a dick to yourself about any and all issues you hear in the recording, and re-record.
I know I stumbled on my shit here and there in these tracks I've done here, but none of them are a finished product. At best, you've heard my scratch tracks which I'm still working on but are either solid enough to share, or I just did for shits and giggles in the first place.
BTW, you ever check out my "Facebook band page?"
You were one of the dudes I wanted to get some feedback from.
Roll with the positives, man. You've shown steady improvement, and you know a few cats who know a few things. I'm still trying to figure out the gap between Saunders and myself. Kids got a craaaazy style that I don't, and while I'm not going to be going the same way he is, I know there's something there I can learn. So far, it's that a lot of people bite more on the vocal than the lyrics, but he's got some stagger to his progresisons that are pretty interesting.
Don't lose yourself, but add on what you're getting from other pepole. As much as it stings, those little bites will teach you a lot when someone comes at you with them.
Ok, I did say it was nothing personal, I'm not going to sit here and lie to you, sorry, yes I can see you've made improvements but it genuinely reminded me of the skit on Ludacris' word of mouf album about white people rapping. If you listen to your lyrics they make literally no sense. That's not my fault is it? You're offbeat throughout almost every track... You either can rap, or you can't, that's a fact, its nothing against you dude, I can't paint for shit, thus, you won't see me posting pictures of my retarded stick horses and asking for feedback, I certainly wouldn't get pissy if people then told me I'm shit.
If it was about expressing yourself surely you'd be... Saying something?
"Makes you disable comments on YouTube" - really dude, this speaks for itself. If you can't take criticism you are stepping into the wrong ball park.
N don't make excuses about people synthing theory voices, I know enough rappers who blow minds, not a single bit of tweaking and a lot is freestyle, outside of the charts that don't happen too much...
DonV as I said I loved your style, really upbeat, ill go listen to some of that no doubt.
You on ps3?
Props to all you guys for putting it out there and sorry if it feels like a personal attack Antwan, it isn't meant to be.
Peace
I get you..
But it's back to your opinion
I am saying something
just because someone doesn't think it's anything
doesn't mean I'm not expressing
or trying to relieve stress
or just passing time..
this isn't serious to me
Progression doesn't mean shit.
If someone likes it, cool..
gaining anything that might make me seem "better" is coincidental.
If you call me out, I will take it as that..
You say I'm "bad", but never say "try this" or "this is off"
it's an insult, an attack.. meant or not
I'm being real.. if you can't see where that is an attack and not advice, I don't know..
but that's just making a point..
it really doesn't matter.
Thanks, Deuce. Like I said, none of this would go out as a finished product, so I don't fix those little stumbles if they don't crash my flow, but I'm working on that more than most things I need to address. I'm striving to be one of those really cohesive MC's, so I'll take that comment about the the overall progression to heart. Appreciate the good feedback!
Also More of my ish
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