First off... NICE song! I believe thats from THUG2, but good nonetheless... You had a lot of fast lines with neat tricks in there and I have a faster style so I like that lol... The filming was a lot better then most people's first video. One of the things you have to lookout for is I believe you had a lazer flip out of a grind and a 360 inward(or hard idk lol) and those tricks(depending on style) or a big no no. On your lines, get a bit closer and a bit lower: Tips in this video http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XXd_bHS3uOc

Overall that was very good for your first! Keep them coming!