Rap of the Week?

[Antwan]

Thanks rep
Here's the latest

[DonVigo]

Dude, your flow jumped like 10 notches this time around. GOOD show. The geeky critique I have for you: Mellow out your rhymeschemes. You could afford to use a few more words inbetween rhymes and say a lot more to enrich the overall lyrical quality of your tracks. Being an MC is about having something to say, or at least, it should be.

To put it into relative terms: You're going all Haslam on this shit. We need you a bit more Hosoi. Haslam's tech abilities are freaky-good, but you could use some more flowey and showey style ala Hosoi.

Here's my attempt:

[Antwan]

Nice, Nice..
Yeah man I just got my running shoes on in this thing
Jog before I run.

[DonVigo]

Yeah, kinda. Trust me on this one, if there's one thing my producer busts my balls on it's my word count. I'm finding myself doing more work in editing my thoughts down than I ever do putting them down the first time. I keep telling myself: "I must be fluid. Flow, don't drip."

[Antwan]

That's my issue..
My flow goes up when I cut down word count
I feel I gotta figure some way to combine the two
It'll get there.. I think I'm progressing pretty fast.

[replicant]

Thought I'd bring out a rapper to you guys that you might not know, but I think shares a style that both of you can identify with. I've listened to MC Celtic for about 4ish years now after someone sent me to his myspace in WoW. The dude is out of Florida and has a nice style, flow for days, and great beats. He usually releases his albums on his myspace/website for 2-4 weeks completely free and then puts them on itunes and such to sell.

His Website (Being Rebuilt from his old site):
http://www.mcceltic.com

His Myspace:
http://www.myspace.com/celtic01


I have his Riot in Dublin album which I don't think he sells anymore I can hook you up with if you like his style. Independence Day is my favorite album, but his other two are still solid as well.

My favorite song he does is Old School Master off of Independence Day. Couldn't find a youtube of it so here is a SoundClick link with it. He has 4 songs posted there you can listen to.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/defa...?bandID=619789

[DonVigo]

Thanks Rep! Back when I fronted a band I was allowed a minute between every song for the random nonsense I'd just come up with. I swear that's how we booked shows. "You're the punk band with the funny guy who raps, right?!" It's an odd complement when you hear more about your humor than music, but fuck, at least people are listening!!!

Speaking of, I'm listening to MC Celtic right now, and I dig. I have to admit, that's almost exactly what I wish my voice sounded like. I have this whole nasily nerd thing going on... Which... Seeing as I'm a total geek works.... But, sometimes I wanna be one of the cool MC's.

And Antwan, you nailed a couple things. Less words means more flow, and you're coming along QUICK. Getting good at this shit is a tough process, 'cause you have to be willing to focus a LOT more on your shortcomings than what you do well so you can improve. Chef Gordon Ramsey was a good teacher for me in this regard. The only feedback he wants is negative, 'cause that's what he needs to work on. I still think praise where it's due, though. One of these days, we should collab a track about fakeskating or something.

Also, if you ever need instrumentals, I have a pretty deep collection. Loves me the bittorrent marketplace.

[replicant]

Dude, your flow jumped like 10 notches this time around. GOOD show. The geeky critique I have for you: Mellow out your rhymeschemes. You could afford to use a few more words inbetween rhymes and say a lot more to enrich the overall lyrical quality of your tracks. Being an MC is about having something to say, or at least, it should be.

To put it into relative terms: You're going all Haslam on this shit. We need you a bit more Hosoi. Haslam's tech abilities are freaky-good, but you could use some more flowey and showey style ala Hosoi.

Here's my attempt:

I lol'd at the end when you complimented the beat and your words. Nice work man and I agree about message and flow.

[replicant]

Thanks rep
Here's the latest

Definitely not bad. I think from :55-the end you did well. Right at :55 you twisted a bit for like 1s-2s, but then got on track and it flowed pretty good.
The earlier parts weren't bad, but with such a smooth jazz beat it felt a bit off with all the breaks.
Keeping the flow going with the beat to me should be paramount. You may also consider tuning songs up octave slightly so they harmonize a bit more with your voice since it's a little high.
Solid improvement though.