Believe

[Antwan]

Came out gritty but obviously my opinion is biased, right?
I love this shit.. It's a different direction.. but something positive.
I hope you can connect with it like I did..
finally got some time to make something out of it.

Anyway, If you drop an opinion just include what you think about the direction I'm going.
Thanks.
-Antwan


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-yrVqbniLUM

[Antwan]

So it took someone who supports me to tell me this is hard to understand for me to realize it..
time to start taking things a little more seriously.. Plans to remake.

[MackBoogie]

I.....actually like this....

Couple of problems...

Is that the quality of your mic or is that an effect you put on it? Sounds like rapping through one of those prison visit phones.Example

Everytime you said "YAAA, DAAMN, MAAAN" I cringed a little

You need to count syllables on alot of your lines...You try to cram a mouthful into one rhyme and it slams the whole line off beat.

Its an improvement

[MarcoPoloUSN]

I thought it was dope. Cool delivery. The mic effect was actually fitting imo.

[Antwan]

Appreciate that Mack..
Yeah.. recorded on my droid in a loft so it came out kind of spacey..
I might have a mic around but I need to start testing these things before hand..
I get hyped and stubborn.

Thanks Marco

[Roccityroller]

What mack said.

It was good, haven't really listened to any of your other stuff. But with a better quality recording it could be good.

but yea, what he said about counting syllables.

[Antwan]

Feeling that..
thanks guys.

I know most in this community are pretty straight forward about opinions so hearing people say it's getting there means alot.

This is something I've been sitting on for quite some time so you can imagine why I might be excited..
I've got to get this shit together though I bet I can make something great.. same goes for skating man..
This all ties in together.. On the right track!
Word!

[EternalRewind]

best one so far...

also you should befriend other people on youtube that do what you do, there are tons of them out there. Its a good way to be critiqued and be heard

[SK8ERatWAR]

yeah, this is actually pretty good.. I like the beat and your rapping isn't bad at all!